This is not ENTIRELY mine. A student looked at my version, a sophomore no less, and commented that I didn’t have a unifying connection in the dialogue that would create tension and build up to the final denouement. Then he walked off and sat down for class. I didn’t know whether I wanted to smack him upside the head or give him chocolate. He wrote in Odysseus and the song at the end. If he didn’t get credit he would think up some diabolical trick to play on me. The ten pound skipping stone he bought me is another story. Here we go with this story.
Odysseus: Listen up men! We’ll exit on my command. Troy is ours! Now
1st soldier: Its dark in here
!st: I’m a little afraid of the dark. You know, just a little. You can’t see things.
O: Quiet! After we turn off Oracle boulevard…
2nd: I know what you mean. Something can crawl on you and you don’t know what it is.
O: you’re trained soldiers for Joves sake!
1st: and you begin to imagine teeth, hairy little legs… its worse when there are more than four because then it’s a bug. Hey, is that your hand?
1st: well, whats that running down my leg?
2nd: its my lunch
1st: you eat insects?
2nd: its crab
1st why is it moving?
2nd: I didn’t have time to kill it.
1st: can I have a bite?
1st: it just bit me!
2nd: you know its fresh
O: Pay attention!
3rd: its hot in here
O: O for…
3rd:I itch under my armor. Maybe I could take it off. just for a little while
3rd: you’re touching me.
2nd: no I’m not
3rd: yes you are. ODYSSEUS! He’s touching me.
2nd: I am not. Its my sword
3rd: that is NOT your sword.
O: ARE THERE ANY QUESTIONS on our formations when we leave the horse?
3rd: Do we have a war cry? Like COWABUNGA! Or charge! Or run in one direction at high velocity!
O : I should have known that question was a mistake
1st: so when do we get out?
O: when the Trojans get drunk and fall asleep.
1st: why are they having all the fun? Why can’t we party too?
O: because once they finish having all the fun we invade the city, take all their stuff, kill everyone and burn the city down.
3rd: anyone want to hear some music? Get us in the mood for pillaging Troy!
They all sing: Oh, into the meadow filled with daisies, I go to see my prince. A kiss! A kiss! A kiss is all I wish! My prince……
Odysseus stabs them all from behind. Another opens the trap door.
Soldier:Odysseus, the coast is clear! ( looks at bodies)
O: it’s a long story.